What do u think of this poem..due tom and i need opnions!!?

"I was out in the lawn one day

About mid-May I would say

I noticed the beautiful arrangement of flowers

Bewildered at the bloom in so little hours

Love at first sight I would say



Enticing aroma fills the air

Picking the gems I shall not dare

Such gorgeous contours, surround me

What so proudly made by He



Heavenly formation looks and scents

Commonly grown along a fence

Thanks to god, thanks to the world

For giving me a chance to celebrate this moral

Love at first sight I would say



They decorate parties, reunions, and dances

Many designs on blouses and pants

Flawless way to say “I love you”

Comes in daises, pansies, roses and yarrows



I was out in the lawn one day

When I noticed the beautiful arrangement of flowers

Love at first sight I would say

Thank you Lord for letting me celebrate life another day"

What do u think of this poem..due tom and i need opnions!!?
I think it is lovely! I would classify it whatever you want it to be, since it is your work, your creation. If it is a school project, then you need to get the specifics and nail it one way or the other. But for poets, I feel like we can create our own works of art like painters, musicians, etc. Thanks for sharing.
Reply:I'm glad, it is a lovely poem. Thank you too! Report It
Reply:You sort of dance between wanting to be rhyming and not, between wanting to be metered and not. I'm not a poetic scholar or teacher so I don't know what to make of the format....I hope your assignment was for free form poetry.



I do like the subject and the way your returned home to the "I was out in the lawn one day".....starting and returning to the beginning is always a good style point for me.



Good luck.

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